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Explanation: I don't normally post two answers separately, but this is so different from my other suggestion, I will on this occasion.
If it is poetry, then a standard term is 'vignette':
In theatrical script writing, sketch stories, and poetry, a vignette is a short impressionistic scene that focuses on one moment or gives a trenchant impression about a character, idea, setting, or object.
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A Vignette, Old French, is a brief descriptive verse. This is a genre of verse that uses clear and detailed images to paint a picture of a moment in time. The Vignette is timeless, it can be found in the books of the Bible, Ralph Waldo Emerson was called a master of vignettes and today's rappers use different vignettes within their first and second strophes to set a scene and expand on it.
A vignette is usually short and focused. The frame of the Vignette is at the discretion of the poet. A syllabic verse form also called a Vignette is one of the many frames a poet might choose. Emerson writes the following Vignette in Blank Verse.
Days by Ralph Waldo Emerson
Daughters of Time, the hypocritic Days, Muffled and dumb like barefoot dervishes, And marching single in an endless file, Bring diadems and fagots in their hands. To each they offer gifts after his will, Bread, kingdoms, stars, and sky that holds them all. I, in my pleached garden, watched the pomp, Forgot my morning wishes, hastily Took a few herbs and apples, and the Day Turned and departed silent. I, too late, Under her solemn fillet saw the scorn."
I think that 'impressions' give me a more subjective tone only because it is so in my native language (Spanish) - as a native speaker you are right, of course in saying that for an English speaking audience vignette would give a clearer idea of what the poem is about. As for butting out, I think that any imput is helpful for me especially from native speakers. Thank you.
It depends on your audience really then. An educated EN audience, if that is what you are aiming at, would understand vignette. If you need something that a wider audience would understand, then impressions is fine, though was generally used in relation to Impressionism, and less by the general public. Vignette also fits better, in my view, with the period in question. However, I'm going to butt out now and leave it to you.
Thank you so much for checking - I agree that they are vignettes as you said, but I think that impressions give a more subjective meaning and express what the poem is all about. However, I am not a native speaker of either English or German.
Thank you. Yes, it is viewable. As I've already said, I myself would go with vignettes, since that is precisely what it means and when it is used. You may prefer another suggestion, of course.
Better you direct your request for clarification at the Asker. She posted me a note to say it was the heading, a title of sorts, followed immediately by the poem.
Why "a poem, or a collection of short poems"? Für mich kann ein Stimmungsbild auch ein Foto, ein Gemälde oder eine Zeichnung sein. BTW:I agree that this is not a non-Pro question.
This sounds like text from a WWI postcard from a soldier, before heading to the front. If so, surely it's referring to the photo on the reverse / photos contained within a letter. Today we would probably say "mood shots", but "pictures to capture the mood" sounds better suited to the period.FYI: Fort Boncelles http://www.latourdairboncelles.be/#Patrimoine_militaire.T
Susanne Rindlisbacher Portugal Local time: 04:03 Native speaker of: German PRO pts in category: 8
6 mins confidence:
atmospheric images
Explanation: This might work. They images giving a flavour of what it was like. Since, from your other questions, this is not about sightseeing, but about war. Is this a caption for images? Or a longer more descriptive bit of text. If the latter, you could unpack it a bit. If a caption, which I presume it is, then this is my suggestion.
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Then vignette would be what I would use.
Helen Shiner United Kingdom Local time: 04:03 Specializes in field Native speaker of: English PRO pts in category: 139
Notes to answerer
Asker: It is the heading - there is no picture only what I posted. It is placed at the top immediately followed by the poem.
Explanation: Stimmungsbilder strikes me as an everyday expression that may also be used in literary writing but isn’t necessarily language of a higher register. “Impressions” is on the right track but needs to be more pointed. I suspect this is one of those cases when different languages approach the same concept from different angles. The German expression, by the looks of it, focuses on mood and atmosphere, and yet, there’s an immediacy to it that’s lost when translated literally (atmospheric images). IMO, that immediacy is only regained in English if you spell out what Stimmungsbilder do best: capture the moment well
"The Assyrians polished chronicles into history, the Egyptians pulled up history into the epic, and the Far East gave to the modern world those delicate forms of poetry that rest all their excellence on subtle insights phrased in a moment's imagery." https://books.google.com/books?id=CfGPAgAAQBAJ&pg=PT1080&lpg...
"A moment’s imagery before the charge of our regiment"
Michael Martin, MA United States Local time: 23:03 Works in field Native speaker of: German, English PRO pts in category: 43
Notes to answerer
Asker: I agree with what you are saying about capturing the essence or maybe the intention of the author. I am not a native speaker of either German or English, but I think that 'impressions' give a more subjective meaning to the word.
Explanation: I don't normally post two answers separately, but this is so different from my other suggestion, I will on this occasion.
If it is poetry, then a standard term is 'vignette':
In theatrical script writing, sketch stories, and poetry, a vignette is a short impressionistic scene that focuses on one moment or gives a trenchant impression about a character, idea, setting, or object.
-------------------------------------------------- Note added at 19 mins (2015-11-17 18:52:59 GMT) --------------------------------------------------
A Vignette, Old French, is a brief descriptive verse. This is a genre of verse that uses clear and detailed images to paint a picture of a moment in time. The Vignette is timeless, it can be found in the books of the Bible, Ralph Waldo Emerson was called a master of vignettes and today's rappers use different vignettes within their first and second strophes to set a scene and expand on it.
A vignette is usually short and focused. The frame of the Vignette is at the discretion of the poet. A syllabic verse form also called a Vignette is one of the many frames a poet might choose. Emerson writes the following Vignette in Blank Verse.
Days by Ralph Waldo Emerson
Daughters of Time, the hypocritic Days, Muffled and dumb like barefoot dervishes, And marching single in an endless file, Bring diadems and fagots in their hands. To each they offer gifts after his will, Bread, kingdoms, stars, and sky that holds them all. I, in my pleached garden, watched the pomp, Forgot my morning wishes, hastily Took a few herbs and apples, and the Day Turned and departed silent. I, too late, Under her solemn fillet saw the scorn."
Helen Shiner United Kingdom Local time: 04:03 Specializes in field Native speaker of: English PRO pts in category: 139
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